While working on my synopsis I noticed I started to write occasional sentence pairs in verse. This was not good– a synopsis should not be a narrative poem, as far as I am aware. Probably an annoyance for literary agents right up there with alliteration.
Then I caught myself starting to read everything with a rhythm. All right, time to get it out of my system.
An intriguing dream steeped heavily in Celtic Mythology involving jealous princesses, a demonic boar, a hound, a mare, and a forlorn prince gave me the inspiration– I thought about turning it into a short story but have enough of those on the back burner, so a narrative poem became the dream’s destiny.
I’ve never written a narrative poem before and am certain there are rules that I am breaking. Regardless I hope you will enjoy the story found within, and bear with me.
In the kingdom of Ingomar, the woods are wild and free.
Filled with secrets and monsters, and groves and ruins,
The foolhardy will enter and never return while the thoughtful can sometimes request,
A blessing fulfilled, a wish endowed by ancient, powerful, goddesses.
Now the ruler of this land lived in a grand castle perched up high on great limestone cliffs.
Each day he walked out, in somber silence, and looked at the foggy sea.
No one knows why he did it, no one dared to ask, but rumor holds merit that a love was once lost.
One day the beloved king of Ingomar, walked out to the edge of the cliff.
He didn’t look back, he took no second glance, then stepped out into the sky.
No heirs to inherit, the kingdom mourned their loss, will their next king be as loving as the last?
A stalwart, young prince, journeyed across the lands to reach fair Ingomar.
When he arrived, he declared to honor the king and win the hearts of his people
“There will be seven days of song and food, and jousting and merrymaking.”
At the end of it all, he will host a great dance, and choose from among them, a sweet young lass.
She will be his bride, a princess for a prince and a queen for a kingdom.
Town criers announce in every village, that every young lady should attend.
In one distant village, the crier attracts the attention of two sisters.
Fair Lura is a skilled huntress.
Nimble and silent, mysterious and wild, many have sought her hand.
With milky white skin, long, pale blond hair and deep, sparkling blue eyes, she knows she must try to make it in time for a chance to enchant the prince.
Beautiful Eloa is perfectly domestic, a master of hearth and home.
When her soft touch graces, any flower or creature, she soothes both heart and soul.
Her golden skin shimmers, her dark brown hair flows, and her deep, green eyes trap distant gazes.
She knows if she makes it to the great dance in time, she will win the prince’s favor.
The only obstacle, each sister foresees is that from the other.
Quietly they steal into the twilight to seek out the guidance of mothers.
Lura moves deep into the darkening forest to a grove sacred to her mother,
Beautiful Flidais, goddess of the hunt and all woodland creatures.
Eloa travels a forgotten path to an even more forgotten place.
Between the rubble of ruins, she enters what was once a magnificent temple.
There she prays to Epona, her mother, goddess of fertility and horses.
Under the twisted boughs of a hawthorn tree, Lura drifts into slumber,
Lulled by the gentle incantations of wind and the conversation of flowers.
“My dearest, Lura, I send to you a gift of my terrain.
The prince revels in the thrill of the hunt and the reward of the game.
This sovereign hound will course and scent and pursue with infinite endurance.
She will strike true and fell stag and boar with hardly any effort.
But be forewarned, her collar removed, and you will take her place.”
Eloa finds her bed on a mound with a pillow of supple green grass.
She enters a trance as leaves begin to dance on branches overhead.
“My tender, Eloa, to become the queen, you’ll need a charger of noble bearing.
I send to you a roan from my herd. This mare will carry you over vast distance, wherever you wish to go.
She will never stumble, frighten or kick and you will never grow sore.
But be forewarned, her bridle removed, and you shall take her form.”
When Lura opened her eyes in the morn, a tall, slender hound stood before her.
With smooth and silky, silvery fur and eyes like the midnight sky.
Ears held erect, pointed like a dagger and a long, bushy tail that slopped down from her spine.
The golden collar graced the hound’s elegant neck, decorated with the dara knot, inspiring reverence.
Despite its beauty, the collar cast dread into the heart of Lura.
She shook off the feeling and stood in a rush, the hound gracefully moved to her side.
It was time to get going, time to make haste, time to hurry to the hunt.
Eloa slumbered until a soft sound awoke her,
A gentle nicker followed by a rush of hot air.
She jolted upright in exalted delight and stared at the magnificent mare.
Adorned by a beautiful coat of red and white, and a long, thick mane and tail.
Bold eyes as deep as emerald pools stared at her, ready to go.
Eloa jumped up and climbed on the mare’s back, holding the gilded rope of the bridle.
No saddle, no bit, no spurs, no whip, the horse only abided by gentle request.
They moved at a quick pace, no time could be lost for the dance was only a few days off.
By the tireless gait of her Otherworld mount, Eloa reached the castle ahead of her sister.
The prince took immediate notice of her because of the red speckled mare.
It was easy to see, by all in attendance, that the farmer’s daughter soon became his favorite.
But on the eve of the dance,
Lura reached the castle, with hound at her side and a boar’s head on a platter.
By the size of the head and the ivory tusks, the boar had once been a monster.
Such a feat to imagine, quickly garnered attention.
The prince fawned over Lura and took her hand in his then led her into the Great Hall.
He announced her bravery and commended her deed and while many did cheer, one jealous sister conspired.
When all inhabitants slumbered soundly,
Eloa tiptoed to her sister’s bedside.
She crouched down and examined the hound resting beside her and knew the collar was like her mare’s gilded bridle.
With no more than a moment of cold consideration
And nary a hesitant thought,
She slipped off the collar and ran with it in her vindictive, merciless grasp.
The knock on her door echoed in her ears and when Lura opened her eyes,
She realized her hands had become silver paws and her fingernails powerful claws.
She sprang to her feet and tangled her legs then fell to her face on the floor.
How dreadful it was for her to witness the prince open the door.
She couldn’t utter a word, cursed only to yelp and longingly howl instead.
He petted her head to subdue her sorrow and pensively asked where her mistress had gone.
Lura jumped on her hind legs, placing her paws on his chest,
She desperately tried to tell him.
But he stepped away and left her to be his princess trapped inside a dog.
She was taken to the stables and placed with the canines to be used for the day’s royal hunt.
The prince was eager to see what she could bring him and the entire pack set out.
Lura struggled to run with them,
Struggled to keep up,
The prince and his retinue rode far away.
Left on her own, she wandered and waded through forest, meadow, and brook.
Into a glen she staggered, where glowing red eyes revealed her terrible mistake.
A boar ten times bigger than the one she had slaughtered emerged with a rumbling bellow.
It plowed through the trees and ripped up the earth all in pursuit of her hide.
She tried to evade it but its fierce tusks scraped her against the side of a tree.
Bloody and broken, Lura possessed no more strength and accepted her dreadful fate.
She knew she would die,
Far away and alone,
Deep within the woods of Ingomar.
Unaware of the pack that had come to her aid, the boar thundered off,
And the prince scooped her up then swung into saddle and held her in his arms in a tender embrace.
Back at the castle, he rested her softly on a blanket beside the fire.
But Eloa saw her and feigned utter dread at the sight of such grisly wounds.
She begged him to dispose of her while callously declaring the dog better off dead.
The prince knew in his heart that the hound stood little chance but could not dispatch her so willingly.
He carried her to the stables and relinquished her instead to the knowledgeable hound-master.
Over the months that followed, the master cared for her and mended her broken bones.
His rough hands always gentle, his soft songs supplied comfort and her strength began to regrow.
In that time, the kingdom celebrated the wedding of the prince and Eloa.
The prince became king and Eloa, the queen
While Lura remained a hound.
One day several months later, Eloa emerged in the stables to check her most prized possession,
The beautiful roan, the gift from her mother that always wore its gilded bridle.
From her shadowy corner, on her bed of straw, Lura watched with keen interest.
Then her pregnant sister took notice of her and scowled in her direction.
“I thought you were dead, you wretched thing.
Perhaps instead of stealing your collar,
I should have buried the fang of your dagger deep inside your breastbone.”
Lura understood what had happened to her, it was her sister all along,
The one who had transformed her into a dog and taken her life as her own.
While she cursed herself for not seeing the truth, it now seemed so obvious.
The horse’s bridle was like her collar, a symbol of a powerful goddess.
And from that moment on, Lura obsessed, with a strong desire for revenge.
The hunter’s shrewd mind set to work a plan of rightful vengeance.
That night when the stables emptied of men,
Lura pulled at her tether until a link gave in.
She crept into the shadows and entered the pen of Eloa’s slumbering mare.
Daintily she balanced on her long hind legs,
Grasped the bridle in her mouth and pulled it away.
With the gilded bridle between her jaws, she darted back to the shadows
Then proceeded to chew and to tear and destroy every last gilded fiber.
The next morning, the mare woke with a terrible neigh,
She kicked and she reared uncharacteristically.
The kingdom erupted with the same frightened fervor at the loss of their queen, the soon to be mother.
For days, search parties scoured the woods, but not even a trace of Eloa was found.
The king commenced with a mournful cry and his subjects woefully reciprocated.
Lura was not done, her plan had not yet come entirely into fruition.
There was still the matter of the pain she endured, the overcoming of trepidation.
Finally, the day arrived when the king decided to go out on his own for a ride.
The hound and the mare were all that were left of his two lovely ladies. So he took them with him, to accompany him, on his lonely ride through the fog.
What he didn’t know was that the mare saw red as soon as she saw her sister.
She seethed to trample and stamp on the hound for she knew she’d destroyed the bridle.
Lura knew this would happen and played this to her favor,
Leading the mare on a reckless and wild endeavor,
That took her into forest and glade, through thicket, meadow and brook.
As she had hoped, the massive boar awoke
And his angry red eyes reappeared,
In the glen where she’d wandered so haplessly so many months ago.
The beast roared as he trampled trees and shrubs, setting his sights on the mare,
Which slid to a stop with the king still astride, clinging to her neck and mane.
She spun around on her haunches and took to a gallop, breaking through branches and ferns.
She raced through the valley, tore through the streambeds trying to stay ahead.
Her hot breath plumed, her heart pounded her chest, as the king urged her to run.
Faster and faster, but the boar was gaining, his stampeding scarred the land.
Eloa flew down a craggy hillside, her hooves clashed upon the rock,
The sound of the sea could be heard up ahead. She didn’t know where else to go.
The mare valiantly broke through the trees and took a magnificent leap from a cliff.
The king leaned forward and for but a moment they sored without wings through the air.
The boar hit the treeline, splintering boughs and leapt right after the mare.
Eloa landed, her hooves covered with sand, she stumbled and fell and the poor king dismounted, thrown into the rising tide.
On the shore with the roaring sea behind her, Eloa turned and faced the boar.
It charged and slammed right into her, driving its tusks into her.
It spun and it jabbed, mangling her flesh,
Leaving her bloodied and broken.
When the mare collapsed onto the cold sand, the boar turned its sights on the king.
Lura scrambled down the rocky cliff in time to witness the horror,
As her poor sister stood absolutely no chance in defeating the monster.
Her heart swelled and burst with grief at what she had done to her sister.
Now the innocent king stood his ground, ready to face their demon.
He held out his sword and the boar did charge but Lura intervened.
She ran underneath its matted wet belly to save the life of the king.
The hound leapt and snapped her jaws tightly on the flesh of the wild beast’s neck.
The boar screamed and flailed as she held even tighter, driving her fangs even deeper.
The beast wouldn’t go down and slammed her against the ground.
Each strike broke a bone in her body.
The thrashing didn’t stop until the king drove his blade into the heart of the boar.
When it fell to its side, Lura dropped to the sand but her legs crumpled underneath her.
She pulled her beaten body to the bloody remains of her sister lying out on the shore.
The hound rested beside her, dropped down beside her and placed her face next to hers.
Both drew their final breaths and with their deaths, their true forms were restored.
The king couldn’t believe it and dropped to his knees then crawled out across the shore.
He knelt there beside them, lamenting and pining, for each maiden had half of his heart.
His retinue found him with the girls in his arms and forced him to let them go.
The tide rose around them and carried the sisters out into the grey sea.
The king never fully recovered.
Each day he walked out on the cliffs near his castle and gazed longingly at the sea.
He couldn’t find it within him to love yet another, to have a new queen at his side.
His only child died with her, Eloa. His lineage died on the shore.
It seemed the kingdom of Ingomar would suffer the same as before.
The king grew more despondent each year, spending his time on the cliffs.
He began to contemplate how it would feel to fall through the air to his death.
One morning he walked from his castle, intending to take the final step
When a stunning red fox stood between him and the beckoning limestone cliffs.
He stared deep into its golden eyes then noticed a strangeness about it.
The fox had an emblem upon its head, the ancient symbol of a woodland goddess.
It sprinted into the forest and he took to a run after it.
Three mythical birds cawed above him, flying with him as he ran.
A narrow path twisted between ancient trees, leading him to a glade.
At the base of a giant hawthorn tree sat ruins covered in green.
On the steps leading up to an earthen mound, rested the fox so tranquilly.
It looked to a place bathed in sunlight, a place where a temple once stood.
The king approached cautiously, not knowing where he was.
When he stood on the grass of the earthen mound, he noticed a second symbol,
The triquetra of Epona, Otherworld goddess and queen of the horses.
The mythical birds landed before him and began tearing at the earth with their beaks,
Then he heard a sound that came from below, like the knocking on a casket.
Confused and alarmed the king dropped down on his knees and began digging at the earth with his hands.
When a colt leapt from the hole he had dug, the king stared in astonishment and his mouth fell open.
It was a beautiful colt with a red piebald coat and it pranced with an elegant step.
The patterns along the edge of its markings were the symbols he’d seen before, on the fox and the ground, on the collar and bridle of the hound and the mare.
Then he noticed a familiar glint in the mottled sunlight,
The colt wore a bridle of his own.
Apprehensive at first, about what he saw, the king held out trembling hands.
When he grasped the bridle and slipped it away, the colt became a boy.
His hair was red, his skin was fair and each eye was a different color.
One sparkling blue and one emerald green, like the eyes of his mothers.